tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post2759746344840647966..comments2008-04-23T20:26:01.371-07:00Comments on Grey Suit, Black Tie: Those Aren't Silhouettes, They Are ShadowsJ Pattersonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00835231457178558222noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post-48537526804776924632008-02-20T11:16:00.000-08:002008-02-20T11:16:00.000-08:00loved it, absolutely loved it.loved it, absolutely loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post-44361375200960118472008-01-20T17:55:00.000-08:002008-01-20T17:55:00.000-08:00080110 11:37 "Those Aren't Silhouettes, They Are S...080110 11:37 "Those Aren't Silhouettes, They Are Shadows"<BR/>-----<BR/>Similar issue as found in "Three Dead Boys," I can't seem to get into the story until halfway 'til the end. It needs to start with the story, give me a sense of place, then move along with the action.<BR/>I found the perspective interesting and very American with an inherent misunderstanding of Moroccan market-style culture - aggressive salesman, high prices, and seemingly no place to hide. Not to be taken offensively, a good story teller accepts s/he has limited understanding of all things human and merely attempts to tell their story as best they see fit.<BR/>I was excited about the character leaving in such a hurry, but it seemed too quick to begin and end. It would help to introduce some sort of foreshadowing to lead to reader in the write path.loveOliverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17965533357697229325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post-67195906693585286342008-01-17T15:18:00.000-08:002008-01-17T15:18:00.000-08:00"I weakly shout out, "Where are all your horses?" ..."I weakly shout out, "Where are all your horses?" My breath only comes in half way and I hold onto it as long as I can before letting it out."<BR/><BR/><BR/>i love this.carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01958061440612986700noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post-67383570251090947982008-01-13T20:34:00.000-08:002008-01-13T20:34:00.000-08:00This painted a picture for me.This painted a picture for me.Johnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06315381531960537625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3765291863190847310.post-38561113239654200022008-01-11T21:20:00.000-08:002008-01-11T21:20:00.000-08:00I love this story.I love this story.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07059920459785824564noreply@blogger.com